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he has lightening bolt eyes and one fucking killer smile.

   let me introduce you to whom i call "fire-fly."

he has ice white skin and something about the way his hair falls that makes me wish mine would conform to such a beauty.

   looking at you for so long makes me feel. Really feel.

he calls them fire-flies but i say lightening bugs.
fire burns hot against his skin, and i can feel the heat in his heart
but lightening bolt eyes can destroy you.

   but god, it's so beautiful first, but only at first.

he calls me his "freckled girl" and i call him my heart
and he says that i shine underneath the sun
like it was made for me, and only me

   but he has telescope eyes, and those can see to the stars.

he has razor blade hip bones and they stab into me while i dream
lightening bolt eyes and freckles like stars
and in my bed at midnight is the perfect galaxy

   and for a second we make one constellation

                    (and we both shine like fire-flies, and people look at us with telescope eyes)
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and telescope eyes see to the stars.
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reni-girl144 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your way of writting really captures my attention and I love reading it, just like I loved reading this piece (=
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licoricefactory Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2009
oh gosh...that was beautiful. that hip bone part got me. i was really imagining sharp hip bones that look like knives of some sort while i read that line. it was beautiful.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2009
thank you very much
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:icononelonelyday:
OneLonelyDay Featured By Owner May 2, 2009
This is so brilliantly written.
It's wonderful.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 2, 2009
thank you!:)
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Danielle-13 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2009
aaamazing! :heart:
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 1, 2009
thank you!:)
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ChocolateAddiction Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
:heart: gorgeous :heart:
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
:heart:
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xxdominoe Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
your words are magnificent
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
thank you!:hug:
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beigegray Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009

he calls me his "freckled girl" and i call him my heart
and he says that i shine underneath the sun
like it was made for me, and only me

but he has telescope eyes, and those can see to the stars.


This is gorgeous work <3
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
thank you:hug:
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beigegray Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
:hug:
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directorbman Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
This is interesting peace of work here.. I like it a lot.
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
thank you
:aww:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
You have great writing~ :D It's really cool to see an amazing photographer have such good talent in writing, too.

I don't always read what you write, due to time constraints and sometimes laziness, but when I do read it, I'm impressed. The imagery is great. :D
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
thanks so much, :)
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009
:hug: You're welcome. :D
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Neyla25 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
This is beautiful.. <33
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
thank you:love:
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Neyla25 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
You're welcome. : D
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BlazesStarGirl Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awesome
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
:hug:
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midnightincarnate Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
Beautiful.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
:heart:
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50calWolf Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
my mind can't really fathom the epicness of this poem, so im just gunna leave it at that xD
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
hahah, awh, thanks:kiss:
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50calWolf Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
;P
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
I love it-
I do find the 3rd line a bit long, but I like how it gets a little clumsy-feeling at the end, exactly the way the narrator seems to be fumbling for words to describe the longing she feels...
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2009
thank you:)
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Blo0DyOrChid Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Sweet... Would like to have one just like yours... :blowkiss:
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
:heart:
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ZombieRoulant Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
I think this one is one of my favorite :D ♥ Sweet :)
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
Thank you!:heart:
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nevD Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
This is lovely, brilliant and doeseverything I hope to be able to do when I write!
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
Thank you:hug:
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WastedThoughts Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
'he has lightening bolt eyes and one fucking killer smile.'
now that is pure brilliant.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
thank you, :love:
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Placebo-Inquiry Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
Wow. I love it. I really like the way you wrote this. Great flow. =)
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
thanks so much:heart:
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babester666 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
you're so clever =) i really like the comparisons you've made to the solar system and connected them again
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
thank you!:hug:
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Clairabel Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
This is amazing
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
thank you:hug:
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latestepiphany Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
so beautiful. :heart:
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
thank you!:heart:
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Kitafee Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009   Photographer
Your writing amazes me at times, this is so perfect.
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
thank you!:wow:
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dustyreader Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2009
I love this. Your writing is fantastic!
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