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it's twenty degrees outside, and when he breathes into the air, the smoke spells sex.

   but not the loving kind, the kind where taking a shower just isn't enough to get the smell of him off of me.

he's all wrapped up into disney movie, magic shit. when i know that he is just some dirty subliminal message, and i'll get sucked in.(but i'll tell myself it's not my fault, because my sub-conscious should be more aware, and i'll pinch myself to make sure i'm sleeping.)

                  i know that's not right. (anything to keep me asleep)

if and when he holds my hand he squeezes 3 times, and that means "i love you." and i am aware that i should squeeze back 3 times because that is just courteous to do. but for some reason i squeeze once, and that just means, "okay."  

    (there is this part of me that wishes my subconscious could catch onto bullshit, and i'd shove all the messages into a jar and make you eat the words you bury into my brain.)

it's the mistakes about you that are my favorite, your freckles and the gap between your two front teeth(you should have got that fixed). mostly it's the imperfect way i am reflected into your eyes, my face is all distorted, and my mouth is crooked, and bent.

   (because you see me the way i really am, and no subliminal message can ever screw you into thinking anything different.)
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:iconriparianveins:
RiparianVeins Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009  Hobbyist
this was deliciously different, haha. i think i've fallen in love with your words P=.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2009
thank you:)
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beautiful-shadows Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
I like how you respond to every comment!!! I just read your poem about William. I love your style babe. Your magnifecent. You should most definately write more, but your photographs are beautiful, too.
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
oh, well thank you very much:heart:
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beautiful-shadows Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
Your very welcome Darling.
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aramak Featured By Owner May 14, 2009
Wow, I really like this.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 15, 2009
I'm glad:hug:
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Casey-Wirrwarr Featured By Owner May 9, 2009
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You are an amazing writer.
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
thank you!
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Casey-Wirrwarr Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
you're welcome. ^__^
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KatMPhotography Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Professional Photographer
Dark and disturbing...

Brilliantly written x
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
thank you!
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CrashArtist Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
Ah, so wonderful dear!
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:iconcreate-illusions:
create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
thank you:bow:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
A deeply metaphorical piece of work can move the hearts of those who do not understand its meaning. I believe this is one of those pieces, a deeply metaphorical literary work. Congratulations, Kalea, you do write well! :heart:
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
Awh, thank you:hug:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
:D :hug: You're welcome, of course. :heart:
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onababona Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Student General Artist
this is amazing and i love how it isn't gushing. you are very blunt and show both sides
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
thank you!
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BloodCriedTears Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Professional Photographer
I like it, nice job.
Odd way of writing but it wasn't bad :D
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
:heart:
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BloodCriedTears Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Professional Photographer
:D
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danineteen Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
That was so beautiful.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
thank you!:hug:
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rimolyne Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
oh my, the very last paragraph is just amazing. it's so very simple, but it expresses so many things. this was just a brilliant reading!! thank u!!!
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
thank you very much:cuddle:
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:iconrimolyne:
rimolyne Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
anytime!!! :D *huuuuuuuugs*
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loligothica4U Featured By Owner May 7, 2009   Photographer
wow its deep and has alot of emotion
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
:hug:
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Poisonedkitty Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
I like this so much. It's just.. so wonderfully written.
I even mentioned it in my latest poem because it says what I can't, in a way.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
Thank you!:wow:
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Poisonedkitty Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
You deserve it. (:
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Neyla25 Featured By Owner May 6, 2009
Stunning, poppet. :heart:

Courteous**, by the way.. ^^;
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
haha, thanks;)
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Neyla25 Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
You're welcome. {:
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Gatzzy Featured By Owner May 6, 2009
This poem has the perfect mix of bluntness and imagery

(there is this part of me that wishes my subconscious could catch onto bullshit, and i'd shove all the messages into a jar and make you eat the words you bury into my brain.)

such as those lines. Amazing.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
thanks so much!:)
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ksmsoccer89 Featured By Owner May 6, 2009
wow...idk what else to say. i love your style. absolutely brilliant.
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
thank you!:)
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ksmsoccer89 Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
youre very welcome :)
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kkriminal Featured By Owner May 6, 2009
Love your writing Kalea. Lot of emotion and this just feels so dirty (in a good way).
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create-illusions Featured By Owner May 7, 2009
awh, thanks bbbaby.:)
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