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dreams make him vomit.

          meet william.

he has spider-leg fingers and eyes so cold they could stop your heart.
(and they will.)

every night william goes to sleep knowing that someone else is waking up with his only friend, and he wishes he could brush the honey-stained hair from her cheek.

         (not the man, who can't even spell love without cheating.)

william dreams at night.

his spider fingers are creeping up the jagged edge of her spine. her skin is the color of milk, and lightly freckled. william keeps her safe, and has made a tiny door, where he keeps her in his heart.

       (he wakes up next to an empty pillow, with an empty feeling)

william writes a book in his nightmares.

   she is in every chapter. her legs stretch across every page, and taunt him with sex, and things that spiders are not allowed to touch. she holds a box inside her heart too, and william watches as she locks the door with william's heart inside.

              dreams make william vomit.
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a dream i had last night.

ends abruptly, as most nightmares do.

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:iconneyla25:
Beautiful. :heart:

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Don't make a sound, shh, and listen; keep your head down, we're not safe here.
:iconfoxxyemceelouise:
wow, this is amazing. love it :)

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Someone left the cake out in the rain!
:iconhardcorepotato:
Good piece of flash fiction, short and meaningful. The structure and lack of capitalization is stylish and doesn't distract. The parentheses show a third character, the narrator, who has an all-knowing viewpoint, and adds a third dimension to the story that is short enough so that the reader can jump right back in the narrative.

William starts out as a metaphor for someone who is in love with someone he cannot be with for two reasons, himself and her relationship, and so fantasizes, but at the end it shows that in his nightmares, he fears his own desires, his own fantasies, and his emotions affect him physically, making him vomit.

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~Share moments, Share anarchy.

Black-White-Club [link]

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You forgot to close a parenthesis?
This is lovely <3
I love William?

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And I asked myself about the present: how wide it was, how deep it was, how much was mine to keep.
--Vonnegut
:iconcreate-illusions:
that's exactly it.

thank you for understanding.
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:iconcreate-illusions:
haha, got it, thanks^^

i'm a little exhausted.

someone needs to love him,
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:iconlittlemissumbrella:
sick. i love it.

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pieces of my paper heart: [link]

The best part about dreaming is that in dreams no reasons are necessary
:icontheused-genuine-fake:
This is simply amazing. Tells a story about what a lot of people go through. Those that understand it that is, haha. I only wish my dreams gave me as much inspiration as your seem to XD

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dont let me fall, because those few seconds on the way down I have an eternity to let my mind think of a million thoughts, a million feelings that hurt me more than hitting the cold hard cement ever would

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